vickista
07-28-2006, 06:59 AM
y'all remember that poem i wrote on the board ages ago for no reason. this one:
“I am the human stain, a symbol of the demon each man carries within. I am loathing disgust and hatred, I am the seeds from which grows sin.
You fear me yet I excite you, with my influential ways. Immediately you forget all innocence in a narcissistic daze.
With deception and evil I march hand in hand, but with your simple minds you cannot understand.
I manipulate your will and alter your thought,
until you are unable to recall which brother it was you fought.
I am the human stain a cunning and intricate slave,
eternally working for my master, for sin deserves no grave."
yeah well today in english our teacher (who he havent had for long and dont know very well) wanted us to write poems and i wrote like 5 but they were all shitty, but she wanted them handed in by the end of the lesson, so i used that one. and she read it and she's gone this is very good etc. so im thinking alrite awsum im on her good side. but then she goes its very "gothic" and "depressing" -she actually used those words, and i was like crushed its not meant to make u feel good, but its not meant to make you slit your wrists or anything, its pointing out the darker sides of humanity- so she said i had to do another one that was "happy", and so ive been doing it for hours but i can get it! this is ther best i can come up with but i dont think its anywhere near good enough. fuck her i can't work under pressure.
thats my piece of shit second one that is "HAPPY"
Among the pain and hatred, among the seeds of sin,
A power much less sinister is growing from within.
A shining beacon of praise, a tribute to all things good,
A reference and a guide for those less understood.
Those in doubt grasp it, like holding a friend in the dark,
And in the lives of others, it forever leaves its mark.
It has a thousand names, it makes its presence known
penetrating evil, spite and malice, we’ll never be alone.
its missing something but i can figure it out!!
“I am the human stain, a symbol of the demon each man carries within. I am loathing disgust and hatred, I am the seeds from which grows sin.
You fear me yet I excite you, with my influential ways. Immediately you forget all innocence in a narcissistic daze.
With deception and evil I march hand in hand, but with your simple minds you cannot understand.
I manipulate your will and alter your thought,
until you are unable to recall which brother it was you fought.
I am the human stain a cunning and intricate slave,
eternally working for my master, for sin deserves no grave."
yeah well today in english our teacher (who he havent had for long and dont know very well) wanted us to write poems and i wrote like 5 but they were all shitty, but she wanted them handed in by the end of the lesson, so i used that one. and she read it and she's gone this is very good etc. so im thinking alrite awsum im on her good side. but then she goes its very "gothic" and "depressing" -she actually used those words, and i was like crushed its not meant to make u feel good, but its not meant to make you slit your wrists or anything, its pointing out the darker sides of humanity- so she said i had to do another one that was "happy", and so ive been doing it for hours but i can get it! this is ther best i can come up with but i dont think its anywhere near good enough. fuck her i can't work under pressure.
thats my piece of shit second one that is "HAPPY"
Among the pain and hatred, among the seeds of sin,
A power much less sinister is growing from within.
A shining beacon of praise, a tribute to all things good,
A reference and a guide for those less understood.
Those in doubt grasp it, like holding a friend in the dark,
And in the lives of others, it forever leaves its mark.
It has a thousand names, it makes its presence known
penetrating evil, spite and malice, we’ll never be alone.
its missing something but i can figure it out!!