My 1st Song

[Lex Diamonds]

Here's a song which I wrote and recorded in about 3 hours today. The first verse is pretty much all my thoughts and feelings about life, I've been living alone for about a week and just split up with my girlfriend, getting in trouble at college, etc. The second verse I just tried to make as much shit rhyme as I could. I've never made a song or even MC'ed properly before apart from a bit of battling/freestyling with friends, so if you've got any criticism, including the "constructive" kind, shove it up your ass. And yeah, I know I've got a shitty mic. And yeah, I know SpitShine isn't the best name I didn't think of it til after I'd made the song and didn't take long over it.

Without further ado. (http://www.sendspace.com/file/5ld5a8)

Lyrics (I even added the adlibs in after cuz I'm cool like that):

Think About It

To the best of my knowledge I’m invincible
But when I’m next in college I need to see the principal
No shit, I’m not joking, all this from pot smoking
Bad grades, few friends, girls think I’m soft spoken
Though I got nothing to say, consider running away
But fuck it I stay, and try and come in the game
Nothing to do but seem cunning to you
Humming a tune, high like the sun and the moon
I contemplate past events as time leads
By from today, laziness defines me
Main problems my inabilities to focus
On anything other than love or drink and soft drugs
It’s all new to me, it usually confuses me
How friends can change every day and start abusing me
So I sit here and drink beer and write rhymes
Spit clear to pierce the fear in my life time
Deliver a message, lessenin’ the pressure
With friendship respect and love for good measure
Open up through music, stay calm in real life
No time for fools their closed minds don’t feel mine
Cuz what I say rings true to every one of us
There’s those who admit it, and dickheads who make fun of us

I know what you’re thinking now

“That was a bit serious wasn’t it? What’s he on about there? Weirdo.
All that shit about love and respect, it’s bollocks mate.”

Listen to this
Pure skills

I rap actual facts and that’s never wrong
Keep goin and showin my flow on every song
I’m so skilled the flow’s ill with no frills in
I’m cold killin’ like snow chillin’ with no feelin’
I’m no villain but still bad I kill fads see
Fill bags with weed chill and bill fatties
You can’t stand me I’m the man your girl fancies
Finds me on Myspace and harass-es
I get high and write sick lines
So bright when I spit mine just call me SpitShine
I sting like bees while MCs bite like crocodiles
Cling to me while I freestyle you copy rhymes
It’s like it’s not right how I write a hot line
Next day your best mate bragging ‘bout he got rhymes
I could make a mixtape, sell it 3 pound 50
Ten years later goes for fifty quid on e-bay
I’m that saviour, savour the flavour,
I gotta go, laters
sorry for the dangerous behaviour…. safe yeah?

[Parkey]

Is this really you? If so; grand work mate!

[Lex Diamonds]

Yeah, you seriously like it? Cuz I spent so long recording it I don't even know if it's good any more. I'm quite proud of the line "Nothing to do but try and seem cunning to you, humming a tune, high like the sun and the moon" though. :)(y)

[ToucanSpam]

Despite the fact that I dislike you and the way you attempt to talk down to me, I'll give you some honest opinon about this:


I think your lyrics are very good and you flow quite well. Your track is pretty bitchin and I like the beat and everything comes together quite nicely.

However, whatever you recorded your lyrics on is dogshit and sometimes the flow of the song is ruined by the 'p's, 'f's and 'b's, but that's not really your fault.

I think if you recorded this over and over again until you got the speed and made it clearer it would be a pretty damn good song, I liked it.

The name is fine, too.

[Lex Diamonds]

Thanks, dude. :)

[sercomdj01]

I love the lyrics! Hahahaha makes me think of some people i know, and thats always good someone can relate to! good beat too! Hell yaaaaaah! When u doing your next song?

[Lex Diamonds]

Don't know if I am but if I get mostly positive responses then I might make another one soon... it really didn't take me long, I just wrote and recorded it cuz I was bored. Plus like I said I've got a lot on my mind at the moment and that's what the first verse is about. I DO actually have to go and see the principal at college tomorrow because of bad grades and poor attendance due to weed smoking. :(

Thanks for the positive comments they make me feel happy. :)

[g-mile7]

Paddy aint that bad!

[Lex Diamonds]

Cheers G, glad you like. Once I get a decent mic and some practise we could get together on something if you're up for it?

[Parkey]

Yeah - I reckon it's really good. Even with the recording pretty raw, I'm well on it! (y)

[g-mile7]

Cheers G, glad you like. Once I get a decent mic and some practise we could get together on something if you're up for it?
And we can get CJ and DJNext or Zap or Mcduff too...Im always up 4 fun times

[Lex Diamonds]

Cool G, yeah I think I would be on that one day.

Safe Parkey, loving the love! (y)

[Lex Diamonds]

http://www.myspace.com/spitshinepaddy

Add me and if I make another tune you'll know.

[cj hood]

nice track for the first time out....who did the beat...you need to rock the panty hose though.....hard p's ain't no joke!

[Lex Diamonds]

Serious man this mic is a joke... it's one of those that used to come free with computers around 5 or 6 years ago. Probably the worst recording equipment you could find.

Beat's a Primo instrumental... Invincible by CNN. If you notice I put a little reference in the first line for the heads that recognise it. (y)

[cj hood]

Serious man this mic is a joke... it's one of those that used to come free with computers around 5 or 6 years ago. Probably the worst recording equipment you could find.

Beat's a Primo instrumental... Invincible by CNN. If you notice I put a little reference in the first line for the heads that recognise it. (y)

doesn't matter........i used a $5 mic and a $50 stereo to record a few trax off of H20....then i snail mailed the audio on cassette to mcduff and zap.....then they hooked it up nice.....thats hiphop bro.....hookin the turntables up to the telephone poles!

anyways you gotta unique voice....step into a real studio!

[faz]

Nice but yeah, like you said, new mic needed :) I added you to my music myspace

[Lex Diamonds]

And yeah, I know I've got a shitty mic.
(y)

[ggirlballa]

oh shit:eek:


your mic gets fucked here & there but thats the crappy mic's fault i assume, i actually liked it, i mostly liked how your lyrics are said clearly no mumbling or no weird southern (or british in your case) lingo that i can't understand. the beat kinda reminded me of MC Lyte's "Poor Georgie" just a little bit.

basically thats was dope paddy(y)

[Lo_Lyfe]

Copy and Paste it and you can be track 7.

[g-mile7]

Copy and Paste it and you can be track 7.
LOL!

[Lyman Zerga]

you or whoever has a hot voice
deep throating hot
the accent is shit hot too
hot lyrics
hot beat
hot paddy

HOT


im dissapointed though, i was waiting for akon to jump in
fuck you

[Lex Diamonds]

I'm glad you all like it, I thought it might be shit. :)

[Planetary]

shit, this track is terrible, what were you thinking?

[Helvete]

I can't listen to it yet, but I'm just posting here to remind myself to check when I get a computer with headphones.

[Pres Zount]

I actually really liked that. I thought it would be boring.


(y)

[camo]

good stuff mate (y)

[faz]

Maybe we should do a bbmb album with the beat makers and mc's here (y)

[hpdrifter]

I like it. I love listening to British accents rapping. I'm not sure why, it just sounds so musical.

Anyway, good show, holmes.

[Lex Diamonds]

shit, this track is terrible, what were you thinking?
What were you thinking when you swallowed Elton's felch, AIDS-boy?

[Helvete]

Hahaha, your voice! Funny ass shit. Overall though, not that bad, you're quite good at rapping, good flow at least. I generally can't stand English accents, but that's not your fault. Get a good mic and record some more shit. Nice shit.

[DroppinScience]

Obviously the quality of the mic is a problem, but I must say, if you had proper recording equipment, this would be pretty good. I'm serious. And surprised. :eek:

[yeahwho]

Wow, first the remixes (http://www.beastieboys.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=71535) and now this.

Glory it up bitch, fine job.

[Lex Diamonds]

Wow, first the remixes (http://www.beastieboys.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=71535) and now this.

Glory it up bitch, fine job.
That thread still makes me LOL. :D

[Parkey]

I generally can't stand English accents
How bloody dare you!





Good day sir.

[Big Gus]

I expected it to be wacker than the Fat Boys.

It's none too shabby though.

[Planetary]

I expected it to be wacker than the Fat Boys.

It's none too shabby though.

lol the fat boys suck nearly as much as this track.

THE TWIST

[roosta]

so if you've got any criticism, including the "constructive" kind, shove it up your ass. And yeah, I know I've got a shitty mic.


you do know constructive criticism is a good thing?

[Big Gus]

lol the fat boys suck nearly as much as this track.

Yeah that's what I said - word thief!!

It's up there with "FatBoys Are Back" rather than the travesty that was "The Twist" period...

[Lex Diamonds]

you do know constructive criticism is a good thing?
Yeah but I don't want any, it's boring.

[roosta]

Yeah but I don't want any, it's boring.

but what if it makes you better?

[Planetary]

not much hope anyway.

[Lex Diamonds]

but what if it makes you better?
I don't really care how good I am, it's not like I'm planning to make songs seriously.

[ggirlballa]

not to diss but sounds like you want people to kiss your ass about your MC skills

[Lex Diamonds]

Well yeah course I do it's nice when people say nice shit... but I'm not doing it seriously so save the serious criticism.

[Big Gus]

I only said it was maybe as good as the Fatboys "Fatboys Are Back" song.

I'd say that in no way constitutes kissing anyones ass over their skills...

[ggirlballa]

Well yeah course I do it's nice when people say nice shit... but I'm not doing it seriously so save the serious criticism.


i see, well so far u haven't gotten much critism, probally cuz it actually was good (kisses ass even more)

[Lo_Lyfe]

i see, well so far u haven't gotten much critism, probally cuz it actually was good (kisses ass even more)
I think many people are abiding by his request to not deliver criticism, perhaps?

[ggirlballa]

I think many people are abiding by his request to not deliver criticism, perhaps?



go suck a chode lmao

[Justin]

You should do a mashup with robin williams

[Lo_Lyfe]

go suck a chode lmao
Why? You little snot.

[ggirlballa]

Why? You little snot.

just cuz its seems like it'd be your type of fetish
uh dun nah

[Lex Diamonds]

My next track's gonna be called BBMB Beef and contain lines about thirtysomething Aussies being sexually harassed by kids online. (y)

[Lo_Lyfe]

My next track's gonna be called BBMB Beef and contain lines about thirtysomething Aussies being sexually harassed by kids online. (y)
I'm 26, and you're 18.

[Lex Diamonds]

Shit, when you put it like that you don't seem old. I've always thought of you as quite old. 26, eh?

PS
I was on about ggirl's allegations of chode fondness, you got that right?

[Lo_Lyfe]

I was on about ggirl's allegations of chode fondness, you got that right?
Oh, right. That as well.

Does the beef part refer to my expression?

[Lex Diamonds]

lol (y)

[Lex Diamonds]

Alright Crafty, haven't seen you on here for tiiiime. My voice changes a lot through the song, as it does in real life depending on who I'm hanging out with. If I'm gonna make any more I need to sort myself out with a rap voice and stick to it.

Glad you like it though. :)

[Lex Diamonds]

http://www.myspace.com/spitshinepaddy

"Mash Up (Think About It Remix)"

Haha, look what happens when you stay up til 6.30am and snort 2 G's of coke then try and make a song...

PS
My 2nd verse was all freestyle- I think it's not bad for someone coked off their head....

[paul jones]

http://www.myspace.com/spitshinepaddy

"Mash Up (Think About It Remix)"

Haha, look what happens when you stay up til 6.30am and snort 2 G's of coke then try and make a song...

PS
My 2nd verse was all freestyle- I think it's not bad for someone coked off their head....
(y)

[g-mile7]

Coke :( couldve left that detail out

[ggirlballa]

Coke :( couldve left that detail out

i was thinking the same thing too, and you sound american a few times here & there

whoa i just notice that i know the first few lines of think about it, what the hell?:confused: damn memory

[ericlee]

Yeah man, bleh on the coke shit. It may even take place of your music writing and recording.

Just be careful man. I've been through too much because of that stuff.

Anyway, good work on the music though, I've transfered it to my mp3 player.

[Lyman Zerga]

i heard it a few days ago


i like it even more than the original



FAN

[Lex Diamonds]

i was thinking the same thing too, and you sound american a few times here & there

whoa i just notice that i know the first few lines of think about it, what the hell?:confused: damn memory
Do some karaoke. (y)

Yeah coke is bad... don't worry though I didn't pay for it. Never have in fact, so it won't become a problem for me.

[g-mile7]

Do some karaoke. (y)

Yeah coke is bad... don't worry though I didn't pay for it. Never have in fact, so it won't become a problem for me.
hahaha oh boy. Just stick 2 Weed...serious though U dont know HOW BAD and WEAK your makin your heart...but thats 4 another thread not this one

[ggirlballa]

Do some karaoke.


switch my L.A accent to british that would sounds quite funny(y)

[Planetary]

BRAPS

[Lex Diamonds]

BRAPS
Haha... after Hamish (aka The Rhyme Minister) drops one of his fast rhymes you can hear my mate Tom (aka Big T) in the background shout "BOP!" :D

[DJ_Skrilla]

super dodgy.

the microphone sounds like butt.

[Planetary]

Haha... after Hamish (aka The Rhyme Minister) drops one of his fast rhymes you can hear my mate Tom (aka Big T) in the background shout "BOP!" :D
lol, raw. rugged and raw.

[Lex Diamonds]

I wanna make another song but I can't get no inspiration.

Can anyone think of a decent theme/idea that isn't corny and clichéd? Cuz I can't.

[DeeJayZap]

these are sick!

dont be a one hit wonder, make more.

[Lex Diamonds]

Thanks, homie. I'm trying but the inspiration just aint coming.

[ericlee]

Thanks, homie. I'm trying but the inspiration just aint coming.

If im not feeling inspired, I'll usually smoke up and have my guitar next to me as well as my recorder. When that first thought gets in my head, I'll record it so it doesnt vanish and then progress.

Paddy, watch some movies or something. You can find inspiration and it isnt easy but you can.

Damn, youve only got 2 songs and a three page thread over them. Ive got four songs and a slowly sinking one page thread, haha. Keep at it though.

[Lex Diamonds]

Yeah, I know what you mean. I came up with some ideas yesterday when I was really blazed though and they just seemed shit when I woke up today.

I thought it would be good to make a song about football as that hasn't really been done much before, but it would be hard to keep it from being corny and lame. Would be good if I could pull it off though.

[Planetary]

Thanks, homie. I'm trying but the inspiration just aint coming.

and someone is slacking with the beats. what a jerk

[Lex Diamonds]

Finish that beat you sausage guzzler.

[Lyman Zerga]

I wanna make another song but I can't get no inspiration.

Can anyone think of a decent theme/idea that isn't corny and clichéd? Cuz I can't.

what about money n hoes?

[Planetary]

what about money n hoes?

ding

[Lex Diamonds]

what about money n hoes?
Good idea, I'll just check if it's been done before.

brb

[Kid Presentable]

Talk about your pops

[Lex Diamonds]

That's a good, interesting idea. My brother wrote a song about our dad and it's now one of his band's most popular tunes. I'm just a bit hesitant about opening myself up like that, as you can probably tell I've got a lof of defense mechanisms in my personality.

I might have a try and see if I could do it justice though.

[b i o n i c]

very well done(y)

keep at it

[Lyman Zerga]

Good idea, I'll just check if it's been done before.

brb

so?

[Lex Diamonds]

Yeah, some dude named "Vanilla Ice" did it back in 1990.