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Bob
06-12-2007, 02:39 PM
In contrast, Ms. Hill’s functions as a book editor do not rely on regular attendance, as they can mostly be accomplished from home.

i don't like "rely on", it doesn't feel right. i'm trying to think of other words i can use (since functions don't rely on things, people rely on things), but i'm coming up blank. i'm thinking of maybe "conditioned upon" or "require" but i don't know, i'm not happy with either of them.

this is important, because judges will be reading this and then they will be deciding to either hire me or not hire me

another question; do i refer to a jury as "it" or "they"? they're a group of people, but it's also a singular noun. this is also very important
milleson
06-12-2007, 02:41 PM
necessitate

In contrast, Ms. Hill’s functions as a book editor do not necessitate regular attendance, as they can mostly be accomplished from home.
Bob
06-12-2007, 02:47 PM
necessitate

In contrast, Ms. Hill’s functions as a book editor do not necessitate regular attendance, as they can mostly be accomplished from home.

at first i didn't like it, but the more i roll it around in my head the more i like it.

yeah, yeah, i like it a lot
Drederick Tatum
06-12-2007, 03:18 PM
require sounds much better than necessitate.
Bob
06-12-2007, 03:20 PM
what the hell
DeeJayZap
06-12-2007, 03:22 PM
"does not"?
Kid Presentable
06-12-2007, 03:23 PM
Memebers of the jury are they, The jury is it. I think. I had a hard time when referring to companies as they as in "Dell are great. They fuck you in the ass with hardware" versus "Dell computers has a market postion as cocksuckers. As a company/brand, it is differenitiated by being a piece of shit"
Drederick Tatum
06-12-2007, 03:24 PM
the functions does not?

stay in school.
Bob
06-12-2007, 03:30 PM
Memebers of the jury are they, The jury is it. I think. I had a hard time when referring to companies as they as in "Dell are great. They fuck you in the ass with hardware" versus "Dell computers has a market postion as cocksuckers. As a company/brand, it is differenitiated by being a piece of shit"

yeah i have that same problem with companies. i'm PRETTY sure you're supposed to refer to them as "it". i guess "it" sounds right for a jury and "they" for members of the jury, that makes sense. thanks.
avignon
06-13-2007, 04:29 AM
Scrap the whole thing and rewrite it as a limerick.
Bob
06-13-2007, 05:25 AM
there once was a woman with CFIDS
she had a good job oh yes she did
but then she got sick
and her boss was a dick
so she now has no job and can't raise kids


oh my god, i came up with that in like 15 seconds, and it's a shame that you guys have no idea what this paper's about because that's so fucking clever. i wish i'd have come up with it back when i was originally writing this thing with my classmates, they'd have been so impressed, but instead i have to waste it on YOU